2 thoughts on “4th of July

  1. Great first try! These are very hard. What you are missing is a forward movement of character. You are very close. Did the friend make the character go? Did the chapter leave before it was over and if so why? Is the character afraid of fireworks? I think if you rewrite with this in mind, you will have a great 50 word story.

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