4th of July


The explosions were going off all around me!

The dogs were whining and the babies crying.

I do not have to be here but I could not refuse.

Can not hurt feelings.  Especially my best friend.

Thought it would be fun.

I am going home and taking my entourage.


2 thoughts on “4th of July

  1. Great first try! These are very hard. What you are missing is a forward movement of character. You are very close. Did the friend make the character go? Did the chapter leave before it was over and if so why? Is the character afraid of fireworks? I think if you rewrite with this in mind, you will have a great 50 word story.


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